Thursday, November 12, 2009

The first paragraph of a news report on the BBC website containing precisely zero surprises:
The government has been accused by MPs of showing a "real lack of concern" for people affected by its programme of 2,500 post office closures.
If anything, I'd critique that for being a little too long and a little too wordy. Let's make it flow a little better and, by doing so, make it far more comprehensive:
The government has been accused by MPs of showing a "real lack of concern" for people.
Yeah, that's spot on.

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